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Others all promised you
they said they'd catch you when you fall
Well you fell
And they walked on
They stood tall
While you stood in hell
Until you fell, broke your leg and could not stand
But that's ok because I've got plan

I'll follow you to the ends of the earth
Just to make sure you don't get hurt

I love you so
But you don't know
You walk by, and I follow
I watch you fall again and again
I watch you die inside again
And it breaks my heart again and again
I cry out that I love you
But you don't hear, you never do

I'll wait for you outside your door
I'll wait for days and days
Just let me in when it rains
And let me know if your in pain
So I can take it away
And pick you up before you hit the floor

I'll follow you to the ends of the earth
Only hold you back so you don't get hurt
I love you so
But you don't know
You don't know

All I want, is to save you
To hold your hand
And help you stand
To let you know not to be afraid
And let you know that you can
Do anything
And it's ok that you fell down
I'll pick you up and make it right
I won't let you be alone at night

Others all promised you
they said they'd catch you when you fall
Well you fell
And they walked on standing tall
While you were standing alone in hell
You fell, broke your leg and could not stand
But that's ok cause I've got plan
I'll promise you
I'll never catch you when you fall
Because when you're with you'll never fall at all

I love you so
But you don't know
I try to scream it out to you
But you don't hear, you never do
But that's ok because
I have got a plan
©2008-2009 ~Xio101
:iconxio101:

Author's Comments

So I have not really posted anything for a LONG time so... Here ya go! A new pome. (I can't believe that 'the Circle' was the last thing I posted! That was FOREVER ago! XP

Anyway about the pome. I had The Frays -How to save a life, stuck in my head when I wrote this so it kinda goes to the same tune XP

It is just a song about a guy who really loves a girl, girl doesn't know he loves her, girl is always getting into bad relationships, guy is always there to take care of her, guy has a plan to make her see he loves her. :)

Wow I finely made a pome that wasn't about pain or saddness or..... bad things! yay me! XD

Oh and I am encouraging advanced critique so ya know rip it up and try make me cry and all that fun stuff. :nod: I am trying to get better so, feel free to help! :D

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:iconhiko-sama:
Awesomely amazing poem. @w@ I am totally loving it, 100%.

I'll have to be put in asshole mood to critique it. xD Actually, no, because that poem made my day. @w@


Awesome. 4985902380582034582349459823045 stars for you!

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Current Obsessions: YOUR MOM

Team Someone-Hit-Bella-With-A-Baseball-Bat-And-End-This-Horrid-Nightmare-KTHX

I'm the Tea Ninjah! FEAR MY AWESOME NINJAH POWER
:iconxio101:
:D :D
Thank you so much!
I am glad my pome made your day because your comment has made mine :D XPPP

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"*SIGH* Stupid boobs" ~Nagi-Tsukiono
"AND REMEMBER! Man love is the best love!"
"I want a YODA SODA!"
"Have you ever tried to shoot a pop-tart out your nose?"-Spacegirl
".... Stupid babies" RVB -tucker
"LOVE ME damn it!" -Twilightwolf
:iconhiko-sama:
Lol. You're welcome. @w@

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Current Obsessions: YOUR MOM

Team Someone-Hit-Bella-With-A-Baseball-Bat-And-End-This-Horrid-Nightmare-KTHX

I'm the Tea Ninjah! FEAR MY AWESOME NINJAH POWER
:iconspacegirl:
I noticed a few typos/dropped words that broke up the flow of the poem, there are also a few lines that seem to not really fit with the flow, but that could just be me. I generally only read/like poetry that either rhymes or doesn't and this one is kind of in the middle so I'm not really a big fan of the style. I do think it's got a good story and that it has some potential, maybe later when I have more time I can help you kind of refine it a little bit, but for the most part it really good :).
I like the story and the meaning behind it, it just needs some refineing.

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"Power without knowledge is useless."
Click Me
:iconxio101:
Yeah I'll look at it today and see if I can't fix it up a bit :D

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"*SIGH* Stupid boobs" ~Nagi-Tsukiono
"AND REMEMBER! Man love is the best love!"
"I want a YODA SODA!"
"Have you ever tried to shoot a pop-tart out your nose?"-Spacegirl
".... Stupid babies" RVB -tucker
"LOVE ME damn it!" -Twilightwolf
:iconspacegirl:
Cool I look forward to seeing the updates :)

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"Power without knowledge is useless."
Click Me
:iconhybridsmiley:
d'awwwww that's so cute. I enjoyed reading that. Nice work :D

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Smile... tomorrow will be worse
:iconxio101:
Thank you :bow: XD

--
"*SIGH* Stupid boobs" ~Nagi-Tsukiono
"AND REMEMBER! Man love is the best love!"
"I want a YODA SODA!"
"Have you ever tried to shoot a pop-tart out your nose?"-Spacegirl
".... Stupid babies" RVB -tucker
"LOVE ME damn it!" -Twilightwolf
:iconxio101:
XD Hopefully they will be up soon.

--
"*SIGH* Stupid boobs" ~Nagi-Tsukiono
"AND REMEMBER! Man love is the best love!"
"I want a YODA SODA!"
"Have you ever tried to shoot a pop-tart out your nose?"-Spacegirl
".... Stupid babies" RVB -tucker
"LOVE ME damn it!" -Twilightwolf

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